Comment: This is a significant moment in the essay as the student describes the first moment when their perspective shifted significantly, demonstrating growth and ability to develop ideas and approaches. The student also shares an extremely personal memory regarding their family situation. This vulnerability is not only striking to the reader who feels compelled to keep reading the text and exploring the student's story but also shows the applicant as someone with strong positive core values. Both of these elements are effective in making effective Common App essays.

Comment: Here the student presents their background and explain their initial interest in the Arts. Students often mention in their Common App Essays how their academic or career aspirations stem from family traditions or their parent's occupation. What is most important though is that the student in this essay follows up this information with a clear description of how they critically approached their interests and forged their own path. Instead of making art they critically evaluate their interests and learn from experiences described in the essay to understand that they're most passionate about curatorial work and "something that would combine intellectual engagement with their love of the arts."

Comment: Looking at something that most people would omit and explaining the relevance behind it shows the thoughtfulness of the candidate and further proves their passion for the chosen topic of future studies.