The student has not clearly outlined the aim of their study at the beginning of the essay, which is a significant issue. The purpose and focus of the essay are not provided in the introduction, which could be a concern for the examiner. Additionally, the research question is relatively focused, but there is an issue with phrasing that could potentially misguide the reader. However, the student has incorporated appropriate resources and included direct references to the research question, which is commendable. Overall, the essay lacks a clear description of the approach to the topic and includes some relatively irrelevant sections which could have been modified to enhance its quality.
