Criterion A: If the proposed topic or research question is inappropriate, no more than four marks can be allocated for criterion A

Comment: The topic is appropriate for a Global Politics extended essay. It provides a focused analysis of specific counter-terrorism measures, linking these actions to core democratic principles, making it an appropriate and insightful topic.

Criterion A: The student encapsulates the topic of the essay in the form of the research question

Comment: The student clearly encapsulates the topic in the form of a research question: "To what extent did France's counter-terrorism measures breach the principle of liberté during the 2015 State of Emergency?" This question is specific, well-structured, and directly tied to the thesis of the essay.

Criterion A: The essay can include historical references that are either necessary to understand the background of the issue or have direct implications on present events (However, the focus remains on the contemporary issue)

Comment: The essay includes historical references to the French Revolution and France's colonial past. These references are crucial to understanding the context and motivations behind France's national motto, "Liberté, Égalité, Fraternité," and how these principles are perceived within modern counter-terrorism policies.

Criterion A: The essay can include historical references that are either necessary to understand the background of the issue or have direct implications on present events (However, the focus remains on the contemporary issue)

Comment: The essay includes historical references to the French Revolution and France's colonial past. These references are crucial to understanding the context and motivations behind France's national motto, "Liberté, Égalité, Fraternité," and how these principles are perceived within modern counter-terrorism policies.

Criterion A: The essay clearly describes the significance of the selected issue by explaining how it affects the social organization of lives of individuals locally or globally

Comment: Specifically, in the introduction, the student could explicitly mention how the State of Emergency affected the everyday lives of individuals in France, particularly the Muslim community. This would help in establishing the broader social significance of the issue.

Criterion A: The student encapsulates the topic of the essay in the form of the research question

Comment: The student clearly encapsulates the topic in the form of a research question: "To what extent did France's counter-terrorism measures breach the principle of liberté during the 2015 State of Emergency?" This question is specific, well-structured, and directly tied to the thesis of the essay.

Criterion A: If the proposed topic or research question is inappropriate, no more than four marks can be allocated for criterion A

Comment: The topic is appropriate for a Global Politics extended essay. It provides a focused analysis of specific counter-terrorism measures, linking these actions to core democratic principles, making it an appropriate and insightful topic.

Criterion A: The research question and topic selected by the students allow them to investigate the issue based on a specific theory, and concepts and incorporate appropriate methods, terminology, and literature references

Comment: The student employs appropriate theories like securitization, realism, and liberalism to analyze the issue. There are also relevant references to human rights concepts and international law. The theoretical framework provides a strong basis for investigating the balance between security and liberty.

Criterion A: The research question and topic selected by the students allow them to investigate the issue based on a specific theory, and concepts and incorporate appropriate methods, terminology, and literature references

Comment: The student employs appropriate theories like securitization, realism, and liberalism to analyze the issue. There are also relevant references to human rights concepts and international law. The theoretical framework provides a strong basis for investigating the balance between security and liberty.

Criterion A: The research question and topic selected by the students allow them to investigate the issue based on a specific theory, and concepts and incorporate appropriate methods, terminology, and literature references

Comment: The student employs appropriate theories like securitization, realism, and liberalism to analyze the issue. There are also relevant references to human rights concepts and international law. The theoretical framework provides a strong basis for investigating the balance between security and liberty.

Criterion A: The research question and topic selected by the students allow them to investigate the issue based on a specific theory, and concepts and incorporate appropriate methods, terminology, and literature references

Comment: The student employs appropriate theories like securitization, realism, and liberalism to analyze the issue. There are also relevant references to human rights concepts and international law. The theoretical framework provides a strong basis for investigating the balance between security and liberty.

Criterion A: The research question and topic selected by the students allow them to investigate the issue based on a specific theory, and concepts and incorporate appropriate methods, terminology, and literature references

Comment: The student employs appropriate theories like securitization, realism, and liberalism to analyze the issue. There are also relevant references to human rights concepts and international law. The theoretical framework provides a strong basis for investigating the balance between security and liberty.

Criterion A: The research question and topic selected by the students allow them to investigate the issue based on a specific theory, and concepts and incorporate appropriate methods, terminology, and literature references

Comment: The student employs appropriate theories like securitization, realism, and liberalism to analyze the issue. There are also relevant references to human rights concepts and international law. The theoretical framework provides a strong basis for investigating the balance between security and liberty.

Criterion A: The essay clearly presents that the student has consciously selected the methodology and an appropriate range of relevant sources

Comment: The student should explicitly describe the chosen methodology in the "Methodology" section, including how each theory will be used to evaluate specific evidence or cases. Additionally, they could provide a brief rationale for why these perspectives are chosen, linking them to the research question.

Criterion A: The research is addressed by the student through reference to case studies, comparative studies, analysis, and relevant discourse

Comment: The student could expand on these comparisons by providing a more detailed analysis of how counter-terrorism measures have been approached in different countries, drawing similarities or contrasts with the French case, thereby enriching the analysis and providing more depth.

Criterion A: The implemented research technique, (e.g. interviews, literature, and media reviews, or quantitative data analysis) is appropriate to the chosen topic

Comment: The research technique used in this essay primarily involves a literature review, which is appropriate for the analysis of counter-terrorism measures and their impact on civil liberties. Given the nature of the topic, relying on existing academic sources, reports from organizations like Amnesty International, and governmental documents is fitting for building an informed argument.

Criterion A: The implemented research technique, (e.g. interviews, literature, and media reviews, or quantitative data analysis) is appropriate to the chosen topic

Comment: The research technique used in this essay primarily involves a literature review, which is appropriate for the analysis of counter-terrorism measures and their impact on civil liberties. Given the nature of the topic, relying on existing academic sources, reports from organizations like Amnesty International, and governmental documents is fitting for building an informed argument.

Criterion A: The essay includes a clear reasoning behind the implemented research techniques and the approach to the research question

Comment: This could be included in the "Methodology" section, clarifying why a qualitative approach was suitable for addressing the research question about civil liberties.

Criterion A: The implemented techniques and referenced sources are sufficient to develop a supported argument and conclusion, which address the research question

Comment: For example, when discussing house searches and assigned residence orders, the student could directly connect the cited reports to how these measures affected individual liberty, making the argument more explicitly tied to the research question.

Criterion A: The student’s critical approach is evident through the use of techniques, sources, and approaches that are based on different theoretical or conceptual perspectives

Comment: The student's use of realism, liberalism, and securitization theories demonstrates a critical approach by examining the issue from multiple conceptual perspectives. This theoretical diversity helps provide a balanced view of the topic and enhances the depth of analysis regarding the conflict between national security and civil liberties.

Criterion A: The essay presents an appropriate range of sources and research methods which are relevant to the posed research question

Comment: The essay incorporates a wide range of sources, including academic literature, human rights reports, government documents, and historical context. These sources are appropriate and relevant to the research question, allowing the student to address various aspects of France's counter-terrorism measures and their impact on liberties.

Criterion A: The choice of secondary sources (either used exclusively or in combination with primary sources) is clearly justified by the student

Comment: This could involve explaining that these secondary sources provide authoritative analyses and firsthand insights into the events and policies being studied, which are suitable for examining state-level decisions and their impacts.

Criterion B: The student's understanding and knowledge of the topic is achieved by discussing relevant theoretical disciplines and establishing a greater context of global politics

Comment: The student shows a good understanding of the topic by discussing relevant theoretical disciplines such as realism, liberalism, and securitization theory. The essay also establishes a greater global political context, such as references to the USA's response to 9/11 and the Israeli-Palestinian conflict, which helps contextualize the broader issue of counter-terrorism.

Criterion B: The student's understanding and knowledge of the topic is achieved by discussing relevant theoretical disciplines and establishing a greater context of global politics

Comment: The student shows a good understanding of the topic by discussing relevant theoretical disciplines such as realism, liberalism, and securitization theory. The essay also establishes a greater global political context, such as references to the USA's response to 9/11 and the Israeli-Palestinian conflict, which helps contextualize the broader issue of counter-terrorism.

Criterion B: The essay establishes a clear connection between the selected topic and the discussed political issue, theories, and figures associated with it and

Comment: For instance, in the section discussing securitization theory, the student should explicitly link the concept to specific French policies or actions during the state of emergency.

Criterion B: The essay establishes a clear connection between the selected topic and the discussed political issue, theories, and figures associated with it and

Comment: Similarly, when realism and liberalism are mentioned, the student could more directly associate these perspectives with particular counter-terrorism strategies and how they influenced state behavior. This would provide a stronger link between theory and practical example.

Criterion B: The student effectively demonstrated their awareness of bias from the social or cultural context and how it affects their understanding of the global issue

Comment: The student mentions potential discrimination against the Muslim community but does not fully explore how cultural or social biases might affect the interpretation and enforcement of counter-terrorism measures. The student should include a more in-depth analysis of how biases within French society may have influenced the decision to target certain communities disproportionately. Additionally, addressing potential biases in the sources used (e.g., government reports vs. human rights organizations) would further demonstrate awareness of bias.

Criterion B: The student uses subject-specific terms correctly and does not saturate the essay with unnecessary jargon

Comment: The student uses subject-specific terms like "securitization," "state of emergency," and "liberté" appropriately and without unnecessary jargon.

Criterion B: The student explains any subject-specific terms or concepts

Comment: The student explains important subject-specific terms such as "securitization," "liberté," and "state of emergency." These explanations help clarify the relevance of these terms to the research question and make the essay more accessible to readers without specialized knowledge.

Criterion B: The key concepts of the Global Politics IB course are addressed throughout the essay

Comment: The essay addresses several key concepts from the Global Politics IB course, such as power, security, liberty, human rights, and sovereignty. The discussion on how France's counter-terrorism measures relate to liberty and security directly ties into the core themes of Global Politics.

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