The student has made the chosen title clear and apparent in the submission by explicitly stating it in the beginning of the document. However, the essay lacks clear arguments about the necessity of custodians of knowledge, and the student is advised to make clear references to the TOK title to sustain focus on what the title is asking for. The work effectively links with different Areas of Knowledge, provides real-life or conceptual examples, shows awareness of different points of view, and evaluates these different points of view. The essay is well-organized with an introductory paragraph, main body sections, and a concluding paragraph, and all external sources of information are appropriately acknowledged and referenced using an appropriate citing style.
